Entranced

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Entranced

A child in a café,
queuing in front of me,
absolutely entranced.

“Don’t stare at the man.”
The harassed Mum,
looking embarrassed.

Maybe she’d never seen a beard,
or I reminded her of someone.
But she was mesmerised.

I sat with my back to them,
but could still feel the stare,
burning into my jacket.

If she’d been a young teen
it would have been uncomfortable.

Gyppo

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I would consider ending here, Gyppo.

Also I’d replace ‘she’d’ with ‘the kid had’ so the reader immediately knows you aren’t talking about the mum.

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Another enjoyable read Gyppo. You have an awareness of interactions. Here ‘people watching’ without being obvious…a sixth sense. A contrast to the woman …and the child!

Phil